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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this motivation letter to apply for a visa to be a student of Master’s program “Computer Science” at University of Passau. I have been passionate about computers sinceI was 15 years old when my father bought our first home computer, and I, with great pleasure, started to discover it. Informatics was my favorite discipline at school, which is why I chose Informatics as one of my elective subject. After I graduated from school, I enrolled in the “Computer Science and Computer Engineering” Bachelor program at Baltic State Technical University “Voenmeh” n.a. Ustinova in Saint-Petersburg, Russia which I finished with honors in 2005. At that time, I obtained one more favorite field of study which was systems of automatic control, so I decided to broaden my knowledge by doing a master's degree in “Automation and control” at the same university which I completed with honors in 2007. After obtaining my master's degree, I still wanted to get some working experience in “Computer Science” so I worked as a software developer at “Ravenstvo” for a year. In that position I developed the software for the gamma therapeutic device. After getting that experience I started to work in the field of systems of automatic control of pilot-less aircraft as an engineer at “Concern Granit-Electron” where I have been working for the past 8 years. During that time I mostly have been using knowledge and skills which I got studying “Automation and control” and barely was connected with “Computer science”. After years of working for that company it turned out that there are no career perspectives for me in that company and moreover that filed applications in the vast majority of cases are limited mostly by sphere of defense. As I am tired of working for war and wanted to work in more humane sphere and I wanted to grow professionally I decided to go back to software development. After looking for a job I realized that although I do have basic knowledge and skills in that area this is not enough and my knowledge and skills are not up-to-date anymore because “Computer Science” sphere is changing very fast as technologies are changing very fast. So I decided to obtain masters degree in “Computer Science”. At the same time, I got disappointed in Russian educational system, although it is quite fundamental and broad, it is quite slow response so it is not staying up to date with cutting-edge technologies, it has compulsory humanity courses even for masters programs in “Computer Science”, it is not organized good and it is corrupted. That is why I decided to obtain that degree abroad in Germany which is well known for its high quality of education and where education is more practically oriented and include modern technologies. I decided on “Computer Science” master’s program of University of Passau as it has top place in the CHE ranking for Computer Science master's programmes 2015-16 and a broad international and relevant selection of modules. Futhermore, as a student, I will work on cutting-edge research projects and Passau is perfect city for focusing on studying for me as it is small and quiet so does not have many distractions.
After completing that degree I plan to obtain a position of software developer in a big international company which we have a lot in Saint-Petersburg. I believe that “Computer Science” master’s program of Passau University will give me a good chance to do that because this is great opportunity to deepen my knowledge in the field of computer science, make them up-to-date, obtain experience of working in an international team, and improve my language skills.
Thank you very much for considering my visa application, and I look forward to your positive response.
Yours faithfully, Elena P Circus is all around
Сообщение отредактировал Invarianta - Суббота, 26.11.2016, 19:42